Government should focus their spending on public service rather than on arts such as music and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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social welfare rather than on
artworks
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artwork
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. I agree with the
first
view but
arts
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the arts
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is
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also
crucial for the development of human beings.
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money
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the money
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for
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public service is that some
of
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the
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sectors are more important than
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other
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others
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.
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; the health sector
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more investment to provide
the
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better service to
public
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the residential parks
are
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also
need to equipped properly, so the residents can use those facilities and they will stay fit and healthy. As a consequence,
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society will stay away from
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diseases and their standard of living will automatically uplift
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would be a
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in
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the growth of
economy
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.
However
, the
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activities
acitvities
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activities
related to the arts are
similarly
significant in the progress of mental health.
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,
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music and painting
has
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beneficial to show
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hidden talent because some are good
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the
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crafts. And the most important thing is that nowadays there are a lot of careers
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available
availble
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available
in these fields.
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, they would have a better
opporunity
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opportunity
who are not excellent in
the
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study. In conclusion,
the
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community services are equally essential as the fine arts, so government should encourage
to
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both of them.
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