Government should focus their spending on public service rather than on arts such as music and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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social welfare rather than on

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public service is that some

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need to equipped properly, so the residents can use those facilities and they will stay fit and healthy. As a consequence,

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diseases and their standard of living will automatically uplift

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significant in the progress of mental health.

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music and painting

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hidden talent because some are good

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crafts. And the most important thing is that nowadays there are a lot of careers

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in these fields.

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study. In conclusion,

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community services are equally essential as the fine arts, so government should encourage

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both of them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

207 words

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