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Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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gallery
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 is the
place
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 that
tell
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the stories of the past. well, they are always interesting and captivating.
Museums
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 are the symbols of the cultural values and traditions of any society. Undoubtedly,
museums
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 tell the untold secrets of the
place
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 and take visitors back to historical times. Mostly,
tourists
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visit
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museums
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 whenever they are travelling to new places. In my opinion, there are certain reasons to
visit
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museums
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 which will be illustrated in the following essay.
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, folk want to know about the past culture and traditions of the society, and which
place
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 would be answering all those questions regarding the culture other than
museums
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? They have all the secrets regarding the specific
place
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 and
people
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 can see what type of
people
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 lived there in the area the food they ate and all the things about them.
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,
museums
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 are advanced and provide a
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great
graet
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great
 deal of knowledge to visitors
by
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 pictures,
artifacts
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artefacts
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 and 3D movies, it looks like
people
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 actually travelling back in time and these details about ancient
people
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 are so true and finely defined that visitors cannot avoid their temptation to
visit
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museums
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 and enhance their knowledge.
Secondly
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,
tourists
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 go to
museums
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 because they can meet there with
local
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the local
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 public and get to know about that area in more detail.
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, my friend went to Spain and visited the main museum in the city: luckily, she got a chance to
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 so many amazing
people
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 and they not only told her about the history of Spain
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 but
also
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 helped her
in
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 her whole
visit
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 by providing their guidance and now, she has great friends in Spain. So
that is
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 how
tourists
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 meet locals in the
museums
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 and make themselves connected with
diversity
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a diversity
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 of
people
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.
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, the souvenirs from
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 are
also
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 intriguing and remind
people
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 of the
visit
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. In conclusion,
tourists
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 always want to know about the origin and values of the
place
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 they are visiting and
this
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 can be done by visiting
museums
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 and talking to local
people
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 there.
Museums
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 assist in knowing about the
place
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 in great
details
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detail
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.
Thus
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, helping
people
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 to broaden their
horizon
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horizons
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