Write about the following topic. Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the contemporary world,
people
are working like machines and they don’t have enough
time
to separate for leisure
activities
. Out of the world's ,population a limited amount of
people
have
time
for
hobbies
. There are many reasons for
this
situation and due to
this
people
as well as individuals face numerous effects.
This
essay will highlight the causes and the effect of why
people
neglect
hobbies
. In the early years, our ancestors had different pastime
activities
to live their
life
to the fullest, for an instance, collecting stamps was an amateur interest ,
however
, today
this
trend has declined and
people
no longer have
hobbies
. The most prominent reason for
this
is, humans are working towards money, and since the market price is rising rapidly
people
have to compete with these prices. Due to
this
society have no spare
time
to participate in leisure
activities
,
however
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another reason is that
,
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humans are addicted to social media applications, and they have made Facebook,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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their
hobbies
. For example, today school
children
don’t participate in sports
activities
, just after coming home they log in to their social media apps to play a game or search for gossip.
On the other hand
, as a consequence of neglecting
hobbies
, especially
children
are facing numerous challenges in their
life
,
such
as half of the world is having high obesity rates and diabetes. ,
Eventually
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humans are falling apart from their health and they don’t enjoy their
life
like in the past, due to
this
society as a whole is having depression which is a serious
life
-threatening situation nowadays. For
an
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example, according to research half of Australian
children
are facing depression and those groups of
children
are not participating in any
activities
. In conclusion, I would like to mention that, we should continue what our parents taught us, so we will not face serious issues in the future.
Hobbies
are invented by
people
because it leads spare
time
for us to enjoy our
life
even if we are having busy schedules.
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