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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Cities
 offer greater employment possibilities and a higher standard of living. So
that
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, people are moving from rural
area
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areas
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 to
urben
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urban
area
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areas
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 for living
better
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a better
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
However
, living
life
 in
a
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a city
cities
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cities
 might be quite
challanges
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challenges
. Traffic and
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expensive
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the expenssive
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expenssive
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expensive
cost
 of living are major
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challenges
challenge
challanges
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challenges
.
Goverments
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Governments
Government
 should improve public transportation and construct residential are to decrease
cost
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the cost
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 of living. I will
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elaborate
elobrate
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elaborate
 more in
next
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the next
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 two
paragraph
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paragraphs
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.
To begin
 with, traffic congestion is one of the major problem
face
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faced
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 in
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urban
urben
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the urben
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area
. Many people faced
this
 problem in
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their
thier
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their
 daily work
life
 when they come
to
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apply
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home
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the home
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.
As a result
 of
this
, many
worker
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workers
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 arrived at their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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 late and accident may happen. There for,
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government
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should step up and improve public transport like
metro
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the metro
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train
 or local bus services so that more people can utilize
this
 facility and
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avoid
avoide
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avoid
 traffic congestion on road.
For instance
, recently in
metro
cities
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governments
government
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the goverments
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goverments
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governments
 was introduce
metro
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a metro
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train
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trains
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 for transportation. It was observed that
,
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 after the introduction of
metro
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the metro
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train
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employees
emplyoees
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employees
to leave
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left
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 their car and ride the
metro
train
.
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Furthermore
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, the
second
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challenges
challenge
challanges
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challenge
 in living
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urban
urben
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in urben
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city
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a city
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 is the
cost
 of living. Due to
increase
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the increase
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of
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in
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population
popullation
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population
 because of migration
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people
poeple
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people
 face
shortage
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a shortage
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 of resident
area
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areas
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.
As a result
, in
urben
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urban
cities
 housing is usually much more expensive.
For example
, in
metro
cities
 like
Mumbai
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,Mumbai
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 it is observed the
cost
 of
two
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two-bed
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bed room
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bedroom
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 hall kitchen flat is too much high so that not
any one
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anyone
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 can effort to
buy
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itbuy
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.
Also
, the rent of
apartment
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an apartment
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as well as
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, as well as flat,
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flat
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a flat
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 is more expensive. In
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conclusion
conclustion
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conclusion
, due to high
tranffic
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traffic
 congestion and expensive housing
rates
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,rates
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the
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apply
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life
 in
cities
are
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is
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 more difficult.
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Government
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Government
Goverment
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The goverment
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 should work on
this
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these
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 two major
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challenge
challange
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challenges
 to make
urben
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urban
life
 not stressful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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