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Nowadays tourism generates a significant part of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantage and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion.

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It is evident that
tourism
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 contributes significantly to the national income. During the pandemic,
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tourism
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 sector witnessed a decline in tourists due to mandatory
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border
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boarder
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border
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 closures. The biggest impact was
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noticed
notified
noticied
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noticed
on
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 developing countries like India, which are heavily
reliable
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 on the
tourism
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 national income. Just like a coin has two sides,
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similarly
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tourism
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
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,
tourism
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 boosts local
business
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businesses
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 which impacts the economy directly. The perks of
tourism
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 are
specially
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 enjoyed by
the
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apply
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developing economies as these economies attract tourists from developed nations with high purchasing parity.
Secondly
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, research
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direct
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 relationship between mental health and
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.
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,
tourism
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 allows people to discover new cultures and cuisines. On the flip side,
tourism
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 is the biggest contributor to carbon footprint and pollution.
For instance
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,
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 Mahal has reduced visiting hours as with the rise of pollution the colour of the site is turning to pink from white.
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, due to
increasing
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 number of cases
for
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 vandalism against monuments, authorities have implemented strict measures to enter historical sites. In conclusion,
tourism
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 has both
postives
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positives
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 and negatives. The onus is on the general public to conduct themselves responsibly and to consider their impact on the environment when choosing
the
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 mode of transportation.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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