Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely believed that high
school
programs should include free community service such
as doing some charity works
, Fix the agreement mistake
work
helping
the elderly. To a certain extent, I agree that it is beneficial to high Correct word choice
and helping
school
students
. On the one hand, I believe that this
is a good way for students
to improve their social skills and gain more experiences
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experience
as well as
good relationships with other people
. As a school
student, I am really fond of voluntary activities
such
as teaching sport
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sports
for
younger children, helping the disabled and holding some Change preposition
to
activities
to raise fund
for charity. These Fix the agreement mistake
funds
activities
really benefit me a lot. I have more life experiences. I learn
how to convince more Wrong verb form
learned
people
to help the needy ones
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Furthermore
, my relationships are
Verb problem
have
also
widened. I know more people
when I join in volunteer activities
. They are all kind and friendly so I have no difficulty in making friends with them. More importantly, I am happy because I can help lots of people
which
contribute to the development of society with those Correct pronoun usage
who
activities
, I think we can have many good memories. On the other hand
, there are some students
who do not like taking part in unpaid community service will
be under pressure if they are forced to doCorrect word choice
and will
.
They may prefer something else Rephrase
so.
such
as studying or travelling. They will find these kinds of volunteers
work a waste of time and tiring. Fix the agreement mistake
volunteer
Secondly
, students
usually have a lot of pressure on
study and Change preposition
to
homework
. These Add a missing verb
do homework
activities
can make their time for study more limited. I think that it would be better for schools to set up a club or organization and encourage students
who are interested to join In conclusion, unpaid community service is necessary to be involved in school
activities
but it should be optional instead
of being compulsory for all students
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