In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, as the world's prosperity grows, there is an increasing rate of

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earning significant income which affects society in many

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. While it is generally held that tremendously rich

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the nation, many hold an opinion that the government should restrict their salaries.

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essay takes both perspectives into consideration in greater depth and expresses my personal point of view to evaluate the validity of each claim before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, the limitation of considerable financial gain can solve the problem of poverty in society.

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action will effectively narrow the gap between the rich and the poor in the population.

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, the accessibility

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impoverished dwellers will be enhanced. To be more explicit, currently, most of the money, properties, foods or even healthcare facilities are being owned by those gaining enormous wages. If the government declare

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policy, those resources will be allocated to those who encounter poverty more than

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usual.

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, there exist several negative consequences deriving from

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course of action. It will inevitably

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an

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freedom regarding their financial independence. To justify

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, all the salaries

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from their perseverance and diligence. Limiting their money will

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demolish their efforts.

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, there are numerous solutions that can relieve

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economic issues of the nation.

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donation

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from the rich,

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and allocating

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funds and resources to the

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equally. To summarize, despite the

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fact that

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method is beneficial in many aspects, many downsides come alongside

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as restriction of freedom and determination of money recipients. I personally perceived that

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of

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controlling

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's finance outweigh its advantages