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The best way to improve road transport safety is to ask drivers to take a driving test each years. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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The best way to improve
road
 transport safety is to ask
drivers
 to take a driving
test
 each
year
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
 statement. One of the most important reasons why
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have
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 to take a driving
test
 every
year
 is that rate of accidents will be decreased since people pay attention to the law enough.
In addition
, public transport
drivers
 are supposed to do more difficult tests because they have a responsibility to drive more and more safely.
For example
, according to the latest research conducted by Blake Blosson, Professor at Bangkok University, it was revealed that 80% of Japanese
drivers
 have to
test
 their driving skills every
year
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resulting in the rating of accidents on
road
 only
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10% in 5 previous years and it keeps reducing. B2 Another reason to support
this
 is the fact that they will have time to review their driving knowledge.
This
 is due to the fact that some
drivers
 forget the main rules on the
road
. To demonstrate
this
, in recent news, it has been reported that most
drivers
 who had accidents on the
road
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had broken the rule.
This
 case makes the driving tests clear. Con In conclusion, it is undoubtedly true that the driving
test
 is the most significant factor they should be tested every
year
.
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