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In your view, what is the most important thing for governments to spend money on: education, health, transportation, or something else? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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There are many
people
 who think the government should spend money on health. Others see the need to invest in
education
,
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 or build transportation. I think the most critical factors are medical
level
 and
education
, and money should be spent on those two.
First
 of all, my
country
 has had a COVID-19 outbreak since 2020. Because of insufficient medical
level
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, many compatriots died without timely treatment.
Medical
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level
 is a very important factor
,
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 because when the disease comes, the
level
 of medical care can even decide the
life
 and death of a person.
For example
, in some poorer countries, there is not enough money to spend on medical care. The average
life
 expectancy in their
country
 is just 46 years, well below the global average of 64 years.For these reasons, I think
Medical
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level
 is the number one important factor that governments should focus on.
Education
 plays a critical role in everyone's
life
, especially
for
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young
people
. If
people
 can get a quality
education
,
he
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 will have more opportunities and more informed choices. There will be a good job and a happy
life
.
For example
, in some countries,
education
 is not taken seriously. The
country
 will have a higher crime rate. The crime rate of a
country
 is inversely proportional to the
level
 of
education
. So the government invests in
education
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that medical
level
 and
education
 are important factors that the government needs to spend,
because
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 the
level
 of medical determines the average
life
 expectancy of
people
, and
education
 will change the
life
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 of young
people
.
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