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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. Why do some people continue to commit crimes after they have been punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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The most current headache that countries are facing is the
population
 problem. The issue of
population
 has a great influence on the economy of each country. The government is trying to fix it with a variety of measures. Rapid
population
 growth has made a massive impact on the World. There are many social issues, and the
population
 is increasing.
In contrast
 to
this
, accommodation is getting smaller and smaller.
Furthermore
, overpopulation will exceed the earth's carrying capacity in the future. The
population
 explosion is
also
 the cause of exacerbating unemployment in many countries in the World. Overpopulation leads to the depletion of natural resources
such
 as environmental degradation, and air, and water pollution making people’s life worse The leading cause of a
population
 bomb from humans themselves, the young have not to lack of family planning, do enquire about
population
 control methods and the crucial reason is the birth rate has increased more significantly in comparison to the death rate.
In addition
, The young get married at an early age without any knowledge of reproduction
consequently
, they are difficult in accessing contraception and getting pregnant when they are not ready. Governments in overpopulated nations have a variety of effective solutions at their disposal.
For example
, Vietnam has family planning laws that limit the number of children per family to two.
This
 is a more humane solution than China, Vietnam's
neighbor
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. In the past, they enforced a one-child policy, in which each family was only allowed to have one child.
However
,
this
 policy had a significant impact on their ability to address the issue at hand by stabilizing the
population
 through starvation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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