It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy it. Do you agree or disagree?

#people

There are

people

who are employed that don't enjoy their

work

Hence

, many argue that those who aren't enjoying their

work

must leave their

job

However

, I disagree with the argument as unemployment of

such

a level could cause major economic

problems

. Hypothetically speaking, if

people

were to leave their jobs for the sole reason of it being unenjoyable that would cause major

job

vacancies impacting both the lives of the

people

who are employed and enjoy their

work

and the lives of those who are unemployed.

For example

, firms lose their employees causing a major deficit in the

labor

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labour

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force and the productivity in the businesses incentivizing the aggregate

demand

of an economy to face a major downturn with consumer spending, investments, government expenditure, and the balance of payments. Once the aggregate

demand

decreases the business cycle will enter the recessionary stage causing major inflationary

problems

, and

increase

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increases

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in taxes, VAT, and corporate taxes. With both the aggregate

demand

and the business cycle entering the slump, the standard of living will decrease exponentially with a domino effect.

Therefore

, all the citizens of the domestic economy and the worldwide economy will face major monetary

problems

. Let's take

Amazon

as an example, a multi-trillion dollar online shopping company. Recently there has been news of an exponential increase in labor turnover of the firm with millions of employees leaving their jobs because of dissatisfaction with the

job

conditions given to them by

Amazon

. Statistically, by the end of 2025,

this

major conglomerate business will face bankruptcy as it will not have enough

labor

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labour

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to meet the

demand

of its consumers because the company will run out of new

people

to employ. The reason why

this

will cause major

problems

economically is that

Amazon

is one of the biggest employers in the world and when no one is willing to

work

Amazon

the unemployment rate will climb to all-time highs yet again, facing major economic downturns and a decrease in standard of living. In conclusion, I stand by the fact that

however

hard the working conditions employees may have, they should still keep working.

Correct word choice

This

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this

problem will be solved on its own, because over time eventually there will be an open

job

vacancy suited for whoever is not enjoying their

work

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6Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Fully explain your ideas

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