It is better for people to be unemployed than people to be employed but they do not enjoy it. Do you agree or disagree?
There are
people
who are employed that don't enjoy their Use synonyms
work
. Use synonyms
Hence
, many argue that those who aren't enjoying their Linking Words
work
must leave their Use synonyms
job
. Use synonyms
However
, I disagree with the argument as unemployment of Linking Words
such
a level could cause major economic Linking Words
problems
.
Hypothetically speaking, if Use synonyms
people
were to leave their jobs for the sole reason of it being unenjoyable that would cause major Use synonyms
job
vacancies impacting both the lives of the Use synonyms
people
who are employed and enjoy their Use synonyms
work
and the lives of those who are unemployed. Use synonyms
For example
, firms lose their employees causing a major deficit in the Linking Words
labor
force and the productivity in the businesses incentivizing the aggregate Change the spelling
labour
demand
of an economy to face a major downturn with consumer spending, investments, government expenditure, and the balance of payments. Once the aggregate Use synonyms
demand
decreases the business cycle will enter the recessionary stage causing major inflationary Use synonyms
problems
, and Use synonyms
increase
in taxes, VAT, and corporate taxes. With both the aggregate Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
demand
and the business cycle entering the slump, the standard of living will decrease exponentially with a domino effect. Use synonyms
Therefore
, all the citizens of the domestic economy and the worldwide economy will face major monetary Linking Words
problems
.
Let's take Use synonyms
Amazon
as an example, a multi-trillion dollar online shopping company. Recently there has been news of an exponential increase in labor turnover of the firm with millions of employees leaving their jobs because of dissatisfaction with the Use synonyms
job
conditions given to them by Use synonyms
Amazon
. Statistically, by the end of 2025, Use synonyms
this
major conglomerate business will face bankruptcy as it will not have enough Linking Words
labor
to meet the Change the spelling
labour
demand
of its consumers because the company will run out of new Use synonyms
people
to employ. The reason why Use synonyms
this
will cause major Linking Words
problems
economically is that Use synonyms
Amazon
is one of the biggest employers in the world and when no one is willing to Use synonyms
work
at Use synonyms
Amazon
the unemployment rate will climb to all-time highs yet again, facing major economic downturns and a decrease in standard of living.
In conclusion, I stand by the fact that Use synonyms
however
hard the working conditions employees may have, they should still keep working. Linking Words
As
Correct word choice
This
this
problem will be solved on its own, because over time eventually there will be an open Linking Words
job
vacancy suited for whoever is not enjoying their Use synonyms
work
.Use synonyms
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