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the below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000

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Given is a column graph comparing the average daily amounts of the highest and the lowest levels of two air pollutants (namely Sulphur dioxide (SO2) and Dinitrous Oxid (N2O) ) in 4 different cities (
Los
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Angeles
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, Calcutta, Beijing and
Mexico
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) in 2000. From the information supplied, it is evident that while
Mexico
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 had the worst weather
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 all, the weather in
Los
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Angeles
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 was better than others. With regard to the
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 toxic gas, SO2, the average daily
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 of
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 substance was the highest in the air of
Mexico
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 among all 4 towns (ranging from 113 to 207
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m3).
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, the maximum
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 of
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 gas was 4-times more than that of Beijing as the highest
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 of So2 in the latter city was measured at 54
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m3. According to 2 other cities, the maximum level of SO2 in
Los
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Angeles
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 was around 2-times more than that of Calcutta (104 and 52
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m3 respectively). With the
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 toxic gas, N2O, While the maximum and the minimum average daily
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 of
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 substance were on various different levels in
Mexico
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 and Beijing,
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 range had fewer differences in Calcutta and
Los
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Angeles
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 (ranging from 47 to 59
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m3 in the former city and just 1 to 10
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m3 in the latter city).
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