Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a tendency, nowadays, that a noticeable part of
individuals
do
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not have
hobbies
at all.
As a result
of
such
passive involvement in
hobbies
,
people
start losing their own identity and begin more
boring
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as
individuals
. In my opinion, devoting
time
to
hobbies
is an essential part of
people
's life;
therefore
, a
lack
of
such
individuals
with
hobbies
will lead to a
lack
of creative
people
in society in general. Since we live in the era of the internet,
people
around the world have more opportunities for any sort of content they want.
Consequently
, these
individuals
spend
a
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majority of their free
time
online: searching for something or chatting with their online friends on social media. As
the
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result of constantly being on the internet,
such
members of society usually end up having no free
time
for
hobbies
.
Thus
, in my personal view, will negatively affect
such
individuals
because our
hobbies
are one of the few things that build our personality. According to the latest scientific
researches
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, spending a lot of
time
online could lead to mental health problems due to
lack
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a lack
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of motivation to do extra activities like
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a hobby
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hobby
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hobbies
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. Another reason
of
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this
effect is poor conditions for having
hobbies
.
For instance
, a lot of
people
like to do
sport
as their
hobby
, but they give up early because of insufficient
sport
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equipment or
sport
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sports
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places provided by
government
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the government
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. If
government
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the government
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of any country in the world provides good
sport
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sports
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places and free sufficient
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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for doing
this
sport
,
member
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members
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of the public will enjoy doing
sport
as
the
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hobby
. Even though I was
passion
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passionate
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about football, I found it very problematic to continue playing football in my home town because of
bad
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the bad
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quality of the football field and
bad
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the bad
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quality of our team
sport
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clothes, which were necessary to wear during games. In conclusion, I would say that there are two big reasons
of
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lack
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the lack
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of
hobby
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hobbies
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for some
people
, the
first
is
the
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over
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spending
time
online, and the
second
is
a
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the
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government, which does not reinforce
their
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the
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public to do
hobbies
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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