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There is no doubt these days there are several positive and negative aspects of having a car. In this essay, I am going to talk about both advantages and disadvantages and I will give my own opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days societies are facing a phenomenon called
globalization
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. The question is that
globalization
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 going to
lea d
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lead
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 to a complete loss of cultural identity? In my opinion, I think that
globalization
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 has a big impact on our communities. In terms of disadvantages,
globalization
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 has eradicated from peoples' heads their own religions. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that a lot of Muslims nowadays are not
practicing
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 their faith in an accurate way like in the past. And their faith now is intuitively affected by other religions around the world. To illustrate, some Arabic Muslims celebrate Christmas with their families in different cities in their countries and decorate their homes
by
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 Christmas
tree
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.
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, they are imitating the
western
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 culture which is prohibited in their religion and traditions.
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,
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 their relationship with their conservative societies.
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, many
people
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 from different nations in the world respect their cultures, and they strongly believe that despite all of the developments which made the world a small valley and the ability
of
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connection
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between
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people
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by
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 a click on smart devices, nothing is going to change their beliefs.
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, Jewish
people
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 do not allow changes or any foreign habits which can alter their ways of
worshiping
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worshipping
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 their god.
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, many
people
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 exploit
globalization
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, and they consider it an opportunity to share a variety of traditions and festivals among
people
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. In conclusion,
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globalization
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 has its pros, it has a big detrimental influence on our traditions.
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, I believe that
globalization
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 is a tip to go away from values and identities.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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