Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level.

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could learn and find out what aspects they like and do not like. If they love a certain subject, parents could focus on the subject and facilitate their
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it is important to teach music and other
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could make the learning experience much more fun. Math and other science
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, J.K Rowling, a famous writer for her popular novel Harry Potter, admitted that she has been consistently sitting in low ranking during
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are as principal as other
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at elementary
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because it gives
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much more fun.
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