• Some students found some subjects such as mathematics, philosophy are difficult, so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is known that some
students
face big difficulties learning
such
complex
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subjects
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subjects
as math and philosophy,
therefore
, it is suggested to allow
students
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whether they want to drop these
subjects
or continue learning them. I partially disagree with the given statement, and I think that
this
policy could be applied only in the latest years of education (high school or college)
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when mature
students
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major sphere. On the one hand, a basic knowledge
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math, geography and history is
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necessary
necessay
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necessary
for
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generation in order to solve some problems in their daily basis life. If
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graduated
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graduaded
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graduate
students
from any place on the Earth know some major historical facts about the past, they can easily communicate with each other on different sorts of topics just because of the same knowledge
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history. That's why it is highly important for people to receive
this
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fundamental
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knowledge
knoledge
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knowledge
from school.
For example
, geographical facts about orienting
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place
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helped me not to lose the way in a deep forest, whereas my girlfriend, who did not like geography at all, had some problems with navigation in the same forest.  
On the other hand
, some pupils have already decided what profession they are going to
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. In
such
cases, it is really important for them to focus on their future career, and
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not distribute their time to other unnecessary
subjects
.
However
, there are just
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students
who know exactly the future profession.
Hence
, a lot of dropped
subjects
turn out
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very important for their current job.
For instance
, I
had
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dropped geometry in the 8th grade because of its difficulty, but
then
in the 11th
grade
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I looked
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as an engineer without geometry knowledge. In conclusion, I would say that
students
should be allowed to drop some
subjects
only if they are certain about the decision.
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all main
subjects
should be completed by
students
.
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