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9.An increasing number of developing countries are expanding their tourist industry. Why do you think it is the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The diagram illustrates the consecutive recycling procedures for plastic
bottles
. Overall, plastic
bottles
, which are thrown away into
garbage
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, are gathered at recycling centres,
then
, transformed into raw
materials
, and used to produce new products.
Firstly
,
bottles
 in the
trash-box
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trash box
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 are collected by
the
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specific trucks and carried to recycling factories. At recycling centres, trashes are sorted by officers in accordance with whether they are reusable or not. The reusable
bottles
 are compressed into cube blocks, and
then
, crushed into fractions by Geir-shape machines.
Such
 tiny fractions are washed in the pool.
Secondly
, cleaned
materials
 are put into pellet-producing machines, and
then
 these pellets are heated to form raw
materials
.
Finally
, solid plastic raw
materials
 made from pallets are utilised to produce several products
such
not
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 only
bottles
 but
also
 shirts, pencils, and bags.
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