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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those crimes?

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The world is changing around us due to the presence of
crime
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 in day-to-day activities. The primary reasons for higher
crime
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 rates are fewer regulations and poverty in different nations.
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 can be mitigated with a strict rule of law by the
government
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 and social development for its
people
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. In my opinion, I fairly agree with the stance that in most countries
crime
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 is increasing. Realistically, the main causes of higher crimes within the nation are weaker
government
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 laws and a corrupt judicial system.
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 leads to a disturbing society where
people
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 are unable to protect themselves from an increasing amount of crimes.
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, as per the UN survey on human
rights
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 it was highlighted that out of every 20
people
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 approx. 2% of individuals are a victim of any theft or murder in Mexico.
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 activities have drastically reduced human rights in many countries and most
people
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 are afraid to live their life peacefully. On other hand, if the
government
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 is strong and laws are strict
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 the
crime
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 rate could be controlled. In most developed nations like the USA or Europe, tighter regulations have enabled low crimes within their jurisdictions.
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, if we talk about UAE, the
government
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 has heavily invested in its infrastructure for the security of its
people
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; advanced controls are implemented, police turnaround time is quicker, and everything can be reported in a single click. All
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 developments from enforcement agencies result in a safer country to live in. In conclusion, the amount of
crime
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 is increasing in different countries around the world, the same can be reduced through
government
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 support and strict regulations.
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