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Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion on that? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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There is no doubt that
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 has a different meaning among
people
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. The question is, is the
intelligence
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 best way to determine
success
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 in
life
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? In
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 essay, I am going to discuss
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 question and draw my conclusion. On the one hand, there are reasons behind the spread of the concept that show that
intelligence
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 is the best way to measure
success
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. The main reason given to support
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 the common definition of a successful person is how much he/she earns monthly from a sustainable job.
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, the vast majority of advertisements for high salary paid to require a degree with excellent grades.
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people
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 to believe in the relationship between
intelligence
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 and
success
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 in
life
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. In another hand,
intelligence
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 is not always the best method to define a successful
life
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. Frankly speaking, intellectual
intelligence
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 is not the only condition to be successful.
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, the vast majority of famous successful
people
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 have communication
skills
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 and social
skills
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.
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, recent research approved that 90% of founders of famous companies
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 not completed their degrees but are talented in management and pursuing their ideas.
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, these
skills
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 lead to building social connections which might help them to pursue their passion.
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,
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 could convince other
people
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 and show how they are smart.
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,
although
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 mathematical
intelligence
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 is required to succeed in
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, I strongly disagree with
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. In my opinion, social, communication and emotional
skills
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 are more important to be recognized.
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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic and provides an overview of the points you will discuss in the essay. Your conclusion should summarize your main points and effectively restate your position.
Logical Structure
The logical structure of your essay is generally clear, but there is room for improvement in the introduction and conclusion. Make sure that each paragraph develops a clear point and that your ideas flow logically from one paragraph to the next.
Examples and Evidence
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, but ensure that they are more specific and fully developed to effectively illustrate your arguments.
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