16.When a new town is planned, it is more important to develop public parks and sports facilities than shopping centres for people to spend their free time in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A new city plan considers that it is a way principal

improving

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improve

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parks and sports areas

than

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rather than

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malls for people's leisure. I totally agree with

this

idea, because it is really healthy to spend time doing outdoor activities, and

also

unnecessary shopping is prevented by not going to shopping centres so frequently

due to

lack of them.

Firstly

, outdoor places

such

as public parks and sports complexes are very common centres if society has a space.

For example

, there are so many opportunities people gain from these areas like walking, running, and socializing with other friends.

Moreover

, doing sport is very beneficial for not only physical health but

also

mental health. Recent surveys show that depression is 10% less in the population doing sport twice a week.

Consequently

, having a quality moment at outdoor places will be better for human health in many ways.

Secondly

, there is an unnecessary shopping trend nowadays

due to

entrepreneurs' marketing strategies. Increasing the number of shopping malls is one of them.

For instance

, if teenagers had had so many in their town, they would have spent their whole time shopping

as a result

of the lack of other activities. Eventually, if there are more outdoor facilities, they will not go shopping and that will block unessential expenditures.

That is

why

it

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there

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should be a precise number of malls in one town.

Finally

, it is more important to develop outdoor public parks and sports facilities than shopping buildings. Clearly, it either has useful effects on human life or prevents excessive expenses.