In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The internet is one of the most important inventions
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century. It is clear that online shopping is in
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contineous
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progress. Many societies now
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on online applications as an alternative to real shopping. In my
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perspective
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,
this
is a negative development and affected many countries badly causing serious problems like unemployment and
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cheating crimes rate. It is clear that many
people
lost their jobs after online shopping
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appearance
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appearances
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sales assistants. While
this
complex economical situation, many shops followed
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reduction policies. what
make
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the issue more serious for
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salespeople
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sales
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people
is
general
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orientation toward buying online.
This
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work owners to reduce
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numbers
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of sales staff.
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, Addidas company here in Egypt declined
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of working
people
to
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half as a
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to their new online application. Another negative
effects
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is that
this
field become a method
to
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many thieves around the world to
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steal
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steel
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money and sheat
people
. Many fake website pages establish every day to
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steal
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steel
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money from
people
by selling
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items or by
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steeling
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money from personal bank accounts after taking information from customers.
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,
online
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cheat
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crimes rate tripled in Egypt
last
two years
as a result
of online shopping. The police now
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receives
recieves
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receive
a huge number of online crimes every day. To conclude,
Although
the internet has a huge positive impact on our life and that was obvious in the
last
pandemic, online shopping applications is a big threat to the whole community and it
become
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effective
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tool to cheat
public
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the public
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around the world.
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