In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The internet is one of the most important inventions

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century. It is clear that online shopping is in

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progress. Many societies now

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on online applications as an alternative to real shopping. In my

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is a negative development and affected many countries badly causing serious problems like unemployment and

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cheating crimes rate. It is clear that many

people

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lost their jobs after online shopping

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sales assistants. While

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complex economical situation, many shops followed

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the issue more serious for

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sales

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people

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orientation toward buying online.

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work owners to reduce

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numbers

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of sales staff.

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, Addidas company here in Egypt declined

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of working

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to their new online application. Another negative

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field become a method

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many thieves around the world to

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money and sheat

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. Many fake website pages establish every day to

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money from

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items or by

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money from personal bank accounts after taking information from customers.

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online

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cheat

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crimes rate tripled in Egypt

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two years

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of online shopping. The police now

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a huge number of online crimes every day. To conclude,

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the internet has a huge positive impact on our life and that was obvious in the

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pandemic, online shopping applications is a big threat to the whole community and it

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effective

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around the world.

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In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both view and give your opinion

Some people focus on news in their country, while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.