Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?
Nowadays, there is an increasing trend of
obesity
more than in the past. Overweight
is generally caused by eating too much and moving too little; Add a missing verb
Being overweight
moreover
, the effects of obesity
are health
problems
.
People
that consume high amounts of calories mostly fats and sugar but do not burn out this
energy through exercise and physical activities, their surplus is stored by body fat. Moreover
, companies like kfc
or mc are adding more calories to their meals in the form of double chees Correct your spelling
KFC
of
double bacon. Correct your spelling
or
This
causes that meal is better and people
are coming back. For example
, many people
in my country work at home, also
they do not move a lot so they will not burn out any calories.
Lots of effects of obesity
are involved in health
problems
. Junk food is so unhealthy and it contains a big amount of fats and sugar. Fast-food
can affect every part Correct your spelling
Fast food
in
our body from mental Change preposition
of
health
to skin problems
. People
are getting last
and take away food, they do not move even for food it
can cause bad blood pressure and diabetes Correct pronoun usage
which
problems
. Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
obesity
can badly effects on
our sleep. Change preposition
apply
People
who are overweight have worst
rem sleep. Research shows that Correct article usage
the worst
obesity
affected over 40 per cent of the U.S. population. People
who were overweight suffered the worst sense of humor
, Change the spelling
humour
also
bad skin and blood pressure problems
. In addition
, people
that were overweight whole
life, live shorter.
In conclusion, overweight Correct pronoun usage
their whole
people
are moving too little and eat
Wrong verb form
eating
to
much. Replace the word
too
This
affects their health
and mental problems
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