Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? What are the main effects of this epidemic?

Nowadays, there is an increasing trend of
obesity
more than in the past.
Overweight
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is generally caused by eating too much and moving too little;
moreover
, the effects of
obesity
are
health
problems
.
People
that consume high amounts of calories mostly fats and sugar but do not burn out
this
energy through exercise and physical activities, their surplus is stored by body fat.
Moreover
, companies like
kfc
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KFC
or mc are adding more calories to their meals in the form of double chees
of
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double bacon.
This
causes that meal is better and
people
are coming back.
For example
, many
people
in my country work at home,
also
they do not move a lot so they will not burn out any calories. Lots of effects of
obesity
are involved in
health
problems
. Junk food is so unhealthy and it contains a big amount of fats and sugar.
Fast-food
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can affect every part
in
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our body from mental
health
to skin
problems
.
People
are getting
last
and take away food, they do not move even for food
it
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which
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can cause bad blood pressure and diabetes
problems
.
Moreover
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obesity
can badly effects
on
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our sleep.
People
who are overweight have
worst
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the worst
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rem sleep. Research shows that
obesity
affected over 40 per cent of the U.S. population.
People
who were overweight suffered the worst sense of
humor
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,
also
bad skin and blood pressure
problems
.
In addition
,
people
that were overweight
whole
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their whole
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life, live shorter. In conclusion, overweight
people
are moving too little and
eat
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eating
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to
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too
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much.
This
affects their
health
and mental
problems
.
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