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Some people say it is more important to plant trees in the spaces in the towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many modern buildings are being built for
people
 to live
.
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However
, the construction of many buildings causes environmental
pollution
. Humans create a lot of
pollution
 that damages the environment. Planting
trees
 reduces a lot of
pollution
 and provides clean air to
people
. We cannot ignore the extreme
pollution
 of our planet. Recently, the number of
trees
 is decreasing due to the increase in
constructions
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. It is our responsibility to plant enough
trees
 on earth to have a clean environment.
On the other hand
, it cannot be denied that
people
 need more housing to work in the city
center
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.
For example
,
people
 come to the city to work, if we create conditions for them to live in the city, they will be satisfied with their little work. Personally, I like
trees
 and nature very much. At the very least,
people
 need some outdoor spaces to hang out and hang out with their friends during their free time.
Trees
 can create a large area of ​​shade for
people
 to relax in the summer, which is essential for maintaining a work-life balance. In conclusion, I would like to say that if we increase the number of
trees
, there will be fewer houses for
people
 to live in
,
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 if we increase the number of buildings, the ecology will be damaged, so I think that nature and building construction should be kept in balance.
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