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Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better?

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Pupils are often distracted by flaunting their stylish outfits
whereas
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when
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 they should concentrate
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on
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ob
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on
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 their education.
Hence
the
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uniforms must be implemented to overcome
this
 disbalance. In my
opinion
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this
 statement is wrong.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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 is not important and it’s not always about being narcissistic.
To begin
 with, there’s nothing bad about wearing clothes
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 your
status
.
For example
, low-
status
students
 will work for their future life by watching others who excel
them
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in them
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.
Likewise
, they will be prepared for life’s injustice.
On the other hand
, inequalities can be felt between
students
. In
any
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anyways
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ways
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way
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, we are living in a capitalist society. The same uniforms for all states were in the years of
USSR
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the USSR
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, under socialism.
Lastly
, not all uniforms are
in
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of
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 good
qualities
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quality
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. Some factories use cheap fabrics because they win the tender and need to earn more money. To solve
this
 problem, we should create the example of
uniform
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a uniform
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 rather
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than
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that
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than
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offer
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offering
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 done models.
For-example
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,
white
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a white
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shirt
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shirts
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 and black pants, respectively,
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and skirt
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skirt
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skirts
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 for girls. Every other student can cloth as they afford. From my point of view,
following
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by following
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this
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these
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rules
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 we can balance the
status
 inequality and let
students
 dress appropriately for their position. In conclusion,
students
 who wear fashionable clothes are not always trying to show their
status
. It’s about conveniences, tastes and preferences. Eventually, being able to create fashionable outfits is not
excess
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an excess
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 skill.
Additionally
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 we should not judge and restrict their wishes for their
status
.
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