Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people

believe that advertising affects us significantly on what we want to buy. Others

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think

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think

that marketing messages are so common that we now ignore them. Either way, it cannot be denied that advertisements still play a

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major

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mayor

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role in our decisions.

Firstly

, online publications can encourage customers to buy some products. Nowadays, as

people

spend more time on the internet, it helps to recommend an individually suitable advertisement. Many companies spend a lot of money on social

media sponsored

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posts, because

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people

use their gadgets daily.

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, celebrity and their power

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over

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audience

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the audience

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play

essential

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role

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For example

, when McDonald's dropped a limited edition with BTS.

Then

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company

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had massive sales revenue as the popularity of

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ads.

On the other hand

, we stopped paying attention to posters,

billboards

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and billboards

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. Many

people

find

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

239 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
misleading
desensitized

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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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