Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
believe that advertising affects us significantly on what we want to buy. Others
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think
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think
that marketing messages are so common that we now ignore them. Either way, it cannot be denied that advertisements still play a
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major
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mayor
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role in our decisions.
Firstly
, online publications can encourage customers to buy some products. Nowadays, as
people
spend more time on the internet, it helps to recommend an individually suitable advertisement. Many companies spend a lot of money on social
media sponsored
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posts, because
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people
use their gadgets daily.
Secondly
, celebrity and their power
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audience
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the audience
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play
essential
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role
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.
For example
, when McDonald's dropped a limited edition with BTS.
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company
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the company
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had massive sales revenue as the popularity of
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these
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ads.
On the other hand
, we stopped paying attention to posters,
billboards
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and billboards
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. Many
people
find
advertisement
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advertisements
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uninspiring
that
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and
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most customers ignore
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them
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.
Also
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some
of
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ads
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the ads
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exist everywhere we look and
this
makes
it
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them
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unnoticeable. Radio, tv, lanes, billboards,
magazines
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and magazines
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advertisement don't work anymore, because they use annoying music and vibrant inappropriate
colors
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. In my experience, displaying
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material to everyone is
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method. It
connot
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can not
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useful and compelling for all
people
. In conclusion, marketing messages
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to get more attention. By the way, online publications work more efficiently and get a leading position in advertising sales. Some
people
try to get away from it and make their own decision.
However
, many are still
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addic ted
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to ads.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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