; Some people think that one of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The past 50 years have seen a dramatic increase in the occurrence of environmental problems. Some individuals claim that

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issue could be solved by raising the cost of fuel.

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I partly agree with

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statement, I do believe that there are many other ways to deal with

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issue,

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of looking at only one aspect of the problem.

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with, it is an indisputable fact that after the

industrial revolution

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, the number of car factories increased.

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, nowadays, the air is adversely affected by car exhaust gases which cause a harsh climate. To explain, these gases contain a huge amount of toxic substances, chief among them is Co2. To illustrate, Tehran- the capital of Iran- is a salient example of a polluted city. I suggest that by raising the pay for gasoline and petroleum, presumably, people tend to use less their private cars.

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, reaching

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aim needs pivotal

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infrastructures

like a good public transportation system

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implementation

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cultivation as car/bike-sharing schemes. Equally importantly, the Earth suffer from some other problems more than just weather issues.

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, in recent days, more and more pollutants

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discharged into the oceans.

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, the lives of marine animals have become under threat of extinction. A salient instant is mass-stranding in whales.

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, another major contributing factor is

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challenges. To explain, it might have been seen that more woodlands

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recently destroyed by builders to build more houses and villas. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that

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increasing the expense of fuel can be beneficial for the sake of air pollution, there are a number of other problems which are pivotal as much as air contamination.

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task response

Ensure that all main points are supported with appropriate examples and explanations. Develop the main points more thoroughly to demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.

coherence and cohesion

Overall, the essay shows a mostly clear progression of ideas, but it would benefit from stronger connections between paragraphs and clearer, more effective linkage of ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Environmental preservation
Sustainable transportation
Green technologies
Alternative energy sources
Renewable energy
Fuel-efficient vehicles
Electric vehicles (EVs)
Public transportation
Traffic congestion
Economic impact
Consumer behavior
Disproportionate effect
Government subsidies
Comprehensive policies
Cost-effective solutions
Carbon footprint reduction

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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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