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mobile phones have changed the way many people communicate. Nowadays people cannot live without them if they want to be a part of sociaty. to what extend do you think this is true?

#phones #people #part #sociaty
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For people to live and lead
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 life, one has to earn money. Nowadays people, thanks to the drastic progress in industrialization and commercialization, are given multiple options
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 as taking up
employment
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 in an organization or doing their own business.
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, both options have their own perks and
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 negative sides. Let's deep dive into the pros and cons of each side and see what are my thoughts on
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 topic. Let's explore the case of
employment
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first
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; the main advantage of
this
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 option is that they have a steady and fixed income which is very helpful in terms of mitigating their financial needs in the future. They don't have to invest the capital and just require your time, effort, knowledge, and dedication to a company or employer. The setback to
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 mode of earning is the increment to the salary is less with respect to the alarmingly high inflation. The mode of self-
employment
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,
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, provides the freedom to
work
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 as you like it which is very much required to maintain a balanced lifestyle between
work
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 and life. Unlike
employment
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,
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 mode of
work
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 can pay him more as an owner you can decide the price of your time for the
work
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 you do.
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, there is a risk of unstable income when one pursues self-
employment
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.
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, during the pandemic situation, people who do self-
employment
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 suffer at most due to the regulations imposed on lockdown. Having heard the arguments from both sides, I think it would be better to pursue
employment
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 as it provides a standard lifestyle and
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 I am sure with the help of upgrading relevant skills one can make their employers satisfy them with the right monetary benefit
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