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Some people believe that the best way to control accidents on city streets is to lower the speed limit but others think there are more important issues that need attention before roads can be safe. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #control #accidents #city #streets #limit #attention #roads
The well-being of the
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society is a matter
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 often discussed. Whereas, a group believes that
road
 traffic crashes are better managed by reducing the maximum speed allowable on driveways while another group insists there may be other pressing issues that need to be attended to
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ensure safety. I concur that the focus needs to be on separate issues
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 the speed limit. Admittedly, quite a number of auto crashes occur on
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 lanes.
This
 is often the case because drivers usually have a
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 response time to sudden obstacles while behind the
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For example
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 yesterday reported the death of a
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renowned
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 man who crashed into a deer that suddenly ran into the
road
. It was speculated that the accident was avoidable if he had not been driving so fast.
However
, cars can only move fast if the pavements are smooth.
Road
 users have a higher danger when they have to ply routes that are barely motorable. To illustrate, in Agulu town, most of the motorways are laden with so many potholes that resemble craters, it takes motorists hours on end to drive through a short stretch. To recapitulate, the option to lessen the speed limit of drivers will not have as much effect as prioritizing
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fixing
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 dangerous
road
 conditions
such
 as potholes in the bid to make travel safer.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • correlation
  • severity
  • fatalities
  • psychological effect
  • complexity
  • road design
  • pedestrians
  • mobile devices
  • infrastructure
  • crosswalks
  • bike lanes
  • public awareness campaigns
  • comprehensive approach
  • urban environments
  • speed cameras
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