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Some high schools require all students to wear uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school politics de you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Schools
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 are not only limited
for
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 the academic progress of the
students
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, but
also
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 they teach mandatory lessons like
:
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 discipline, uniformity and responsibility. It has been quite a debate for a few years whether should freshmen need to wear
uniforms
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 or not
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 In some high
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schools
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 the strict policy for
uniforms
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 is changed and
schools
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 allow
students
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 to wear what they choose. In my opinion, wearing a uniform is the best idea because of several reasons which will be illustrated in the following essay.
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 with, not every student can afford to wear different outfits every day. Simply,
this
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 is a problem that middle-class families are facing because of leniency in the policy.
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, it creates a sense of inferiority complex in
students
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 who are from
an impoverished backgrounds
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impoverished backgrounds
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 and they become
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a victim
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victim
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victims
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 of bullying and teasing by other affluent peers.
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, my friend got
the
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 scholarship
in
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 a well-known high
school
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, but she was not able to meet the standards of that place; ultimately, she became so frustrated that she left that
school
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.
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, It is
more easy
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 and more economical to wear
uniforms
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 because
students
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 need to focus on their studies rather than concentrating on what to wear and what not to in
school
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School
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uniforms
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 are much cheaper than buying expensive clothes and taking care of them.
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, In my
school
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, we are free to wear whatever we wanted and I got extremely indulged to find new styles and dresses to wear that I barely passed my exams. In conclusion,
school
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 policies are never meant to be trouble for
students
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, but some policies generated distance among peers and loss of confidence in some financially unstable
students
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. these policies should be banned and
uniforms
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 should be promoted in
schools
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.

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