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Most of our information comes from the internet are incorrec, do you agree or disagree?

#information #internet #incorrec
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 the validation of the majority of
information
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personally
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 agree,
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 is an open source of
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information
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 with limited supervision, which means it's not easy to recognise its
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accuracy
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,
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 to say exactly how much of its given knowledge is correct or not, is a matter of statistical approaches. At
first
, I think the
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correctness
 of
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 given to us can be doubted because anyone
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whether
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whether
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a master
at
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 that field or not, can upload
informations
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 and if you can not identify the writer, you can not easily be sure of his/her
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knowledge
 validity.
This
 problem can be very
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serious
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serious
 when we are seeking
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medical or other vital
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. The unlimited number of pages on search engines
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 can lead us to say that undoubtedly not all of them can be
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written
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written
 by masters. The proportion of invalid
information
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 is not a subject that anyone but statistician can say. We should consider the subjects
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 because
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accuracy
 does not have a meaning for many of subjects. they can be
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 from any source. To declare the exact amount of misinformation on surfing the web, we probably better
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consider only
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scientific
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scientific
 subjects. It's worth
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it to
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familiar
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familiar
 with the way
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the internet
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choose
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chooses
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 to show related results on a search, sometimes they are just
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advertisements
advertisments
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 or based on our previous searches but not related to current knowledge needs.
To be
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 aware of
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artificial
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 can help us distinguish
the
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fake
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information
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 from
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real one.
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 the end, we live in a world with a super speed of growth, Storms of
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 number of sources to rely on, it's
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 matter of our ability to be always alert about what we absorb, not the matter of outer sources.
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