In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In today's world, all people have various dreams and according to some, they will be able to fulfil them only if their tries begin at
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However
, in some nations people believe that unless
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youngsters try enough hard, they can achieve their aspirations in
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years. In the following, the pros and cons of
this
assumption will be discussed to some extent.
To begin
with its advantages, it is clear that if the young generation is asked to do their best in order that acquires whatever they want, probably, they may learn to act in
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effective way and without reliance on somebody else, they can definitely concentrate on their own abilities to construct their future. Inevitably, by following
this
way, their skills and self-confidence would be developed.
For instance
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they will be encouraged to improve their social skills
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their different family cultures.
On the other hand
, in spite of the mentioned good points,
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coin actually has the other side; its drawbacks. By forcing kids to try more in order to obtain anything, they could feel considerably stressed out and as a consequence, in the long run, they may lose their ambition to stick to their wants. Unfortunately, in
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many of those can easily give up from their way and hardly continue making progress. As an illustration, if families put their children under
this
pressure,
consequently
they will feel disillusioned and through
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even their mental health is
also
affected. In conclusion of what is aforementioned,
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children's achievements depend on the hardships they tolerate to satisfy their dreams, the other including me believe that it is far better to consider the disadvantages
besides
the advantages. From my perspective, the
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solution is that giving
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advice to young ones is accomplished by a few flexibilities and avoiding putting much more pressure on them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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