Many people depend on cars in their day-to-day life (for example, to drive to work). However, unrestricted car use has led to a number of problems. Do you agree with the statement

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One of the great technologies in the world

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cars. Machines play an important role in people's lives, one of it is conveniences is that it saves time by bringing the distance closer, and the vehicle that allows you to quickly reach any destination through narrow roads is one of the miracles created by people. you will come

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world is so developed that even houses shaped like big trucks are examples.

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houses, where there is an opportunity to live in any location, are ideal for family trips.

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, it is very good to have a private machine, eighty or ninety

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people are of the population of our city

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transport, but

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causes some inconveniences. Especially traffic jams on the roads,

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problems, even transport accidents can occur.

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leads to the emergence of several other problems, of which human life is the biggest problem because health is the

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, the nitrogen oxide fumes of the transports have a great impact on the environment and cause a large amount of air pollution. Experts still looking for a solution to

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

195 words

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