Many people used distance- learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, an increasing number of services can be obtained
via
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online. As a consequence,
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program
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became
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exception. Many
schools
worldwide provide learning opportunities on the internet to audiences all over the world. Despite
this
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, some people believe those online
schools
cannot provide the same level of merits to
students
as physical colleges or universities can offer. I agree with
this
opinion from two points of view;
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the interactive learning opportunities with teachers which real
schools
can deliver and
secondly
, the
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experiences
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experieces
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experiences
the learners can attain by mingling with peer
students
.
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the statement. The
first
reason that I believe physical
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attendance
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attendance
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classrooms is superior is that the learners can get more intensive interaction with tutors.
For instance
, they can ask questions, request
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guidances
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,
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debate with the teacher without minding the
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time lags
.
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, tutors can offer tailored
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to the
students
face-to-face and get the responses immediately. The learning experiences become much more real and exciting.
On the contrary
,
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studies, generally speaking , require efforts to create a real sense of involvement. The
second
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of physical universities
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providing
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occasions
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to spend quality time with peer
students
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become their treasures for the years to come.
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,
students
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coffer
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or a drink to continue their debates.
In addition
, they can visit each other to do parties to tighten their bonds. Undoubtedly, relationships between classmates become much deeper
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physical
schools
compared to those of
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. Clearly,
this
can be a significant advantage of real
schools
. Admittedly,
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school has their clear merits and under the current environmental circumstances, it became a necessary part of the educational system.
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the
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two key reasons.
Hence
, from both the
students
' experiences with professors and with their
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students
aspects, I strongly agree that
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cannot provide the same quality of learning as participating
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or college in person.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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