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In your opinion, what incentives could be offered that would persuade more people to embrace electric cars? Support your answer with reasons and examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#incentives #people #cars #support
In recent years
the
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climate change has become harmful to
the
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nature as well as
reviers
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reviews
.
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, emissions
that
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produced
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 by conventional
cars
becomes
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 the main
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contributor
contributors
contributer
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contributor
of
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 air
pullotion
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pollution
.
As a result
, electrical
cars
 should be the major part of the solution because of the fact that they are featured
by
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less
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 gas emissions. so, in order to encourage people to replace
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traditional
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traditional
cars
by
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many ideas can be provided.I will discuss a few of these in
this
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Firstly
, as
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traditional
tradditional
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traditional
cars
 are
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competitors
compatitors
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competitors
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in
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an
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 electrical
ones
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perspective , the prices might be the key solution to the problem to remove competitive property.
Secondly
,
awaring
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awarding
the
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society how harmful fuel-based
cars
 are ,
which
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 will raise the sense of
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responsibility
responsiability
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responsibility
 in them. In previous
words
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 I explained how
strong
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point
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 of old
cars
 can be reduced.In the case of electrical
cars
 ,
free-charging
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free charging
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 is preferable,
and
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easy
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 option to be applied for increasing the use of these
cars
.
Moreover
, reducing
tax
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of
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 them can be beneficial due to the fact that it will
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certainly
certinly
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certainly
 reduce the cost as well as push individuals to buy them
instead
 of
high cost
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traditional
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traditional
cars
. to sum up
with
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what is written by myself.The prices of both types should be taken into
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account
accaount
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account
,
also
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fuel
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fuels
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 electrical
station
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stations
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 might be free-cost ,whereas, gas
,
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 and oil stations can be high cost, an
Important
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 role will be played by
fules
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rules
fuels
, and taxes
..
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incentives
  • embrace
  • electric vehicles (EVs)
  • government rebates
  • tax incentives
  • financially appealing
  • charging stations
  • range anxiety
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental benefits
  • green mindset
  • partnerships
  • innovative
  • car-sharing programs
  • ownership costs
  • transitional fleets
  • trust and reliability
  • loan and leasing options
  • accessible
  • broader audience
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