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Some people argue that girls and boys should be educated separately, while others think that it is more advantageous to study in the same school. What is your opinion?

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Education
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 is a learning experience, where an individual learns about various aspect of life, and understand a different perspective
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daily life.
Education
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 is very important to
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girls
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boys
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 in
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society. Indeed, it is very helpful for children to study at the same
school
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, it
give
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 them knowledge of the world around them and
change
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 it into something better if a child join d in a
school
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 together, they will know each other by playing around them, when
thet
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they
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 study to the same
school
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 the power to study hard, according to nelson
madela
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Mandela
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, when
both
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girlds
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girls
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boys
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 to the same
school
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 give them
courage
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 to change the world to a better place. On the other side
girls
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 and
boys
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 shouldn’t separate because one
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 to be together to have a brilliant
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future
futur
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future
, by helping each other.
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education
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 is the best thing that
every one
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 should have
chance
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a chance
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 to have,
this
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 way
they
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the
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both
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girls
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 and
boys
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they
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will start building goals at an early stage. When
both
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 of them are leaving together they will understand what position will help them to
acquiring
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 knowledge, and they will learn together slowly to grab to
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the top
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.
Conclusion
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,
education
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 is the most important and valuable gift that god has given us to
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girls
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 and
boys
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 by attending the same
school
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, it
mean
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really
realy
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really
an
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important word by seeing
both
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girls
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boys
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