Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Education is one of the most important problems that many parents face.
However
, whether teaching
children
at
home
is
best
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way is a controversial issue. In my opinion,
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children
to
school
can get more benefits for
children
. It is obvious that
children
studying in
school
can get more benefits. That means they can learn
lot
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of subjects,
such
as language,
mathmatics
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mathematics
,geography, history and PE etc. These subjects could help them improve their
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academic
performence
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performance
and
easy
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get a job in the future.
In addition
, nowadays, with developing technology,
students
have more chances to get games, action and crime
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, they like
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the
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behaviour
beheavior
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behaviour
but they don’t know what is right,
teacher
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the teacher
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can easily help them to know the thing from right to wrong.
Moreover
,
students
have more
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to play with,
therefore
, they can practice their community skills. Meanwhile, some people believe that distance learning is
good
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method for
children
. One reason is that the
students
can save time and get more time to sleep. The other reason is
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student
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who
studying
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at
home
can get more quiet environment so that nobody can distract them. They can
also
learn lots of subjects online and they can learn more
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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and get more information when they research online. I think that people who
living
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in the world need communication. Learning at
school
can help
students
establish their duty
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society, and learn a lot of knowledge altogether. In
school
, they can play on the ground,
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a sport
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sport
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team that can help them improve group management
skill
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. If they
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at
home
,
parent
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parents
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need to stay at
home
without work to look after them. Distance learning is a good method for
children
but cannot replace learning at
school
.
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  • personalized learning
  • cater
  • flexible schedule
  • extracurricular activities
  • safe learning environment
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • socialization
  • diversity awareness
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • punctuality
  • resources and facilities
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  • experts
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