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Write about your motivation to be accepted in our university?

Like it or not, it seems as if we, the temporary generation as well as future ones, are left with one sole shelter, the Earth. Despite too much unwise development which has resulted in water and air pollution and various other forms of destruction, Mother Nature is still embracing our civilization with endless mercy. In return for all the blessings nature has granted us, I truly believe it is our inevitable responsibility and imperative duty, towards both nature and incoming generations of all species, to protect them from
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 deterioration and to seek ways of utilizing its assets with a minor dent. As I resided in a developing country, Iran, I have witnessed many unbalanced and disparate rules in diverse
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 leading to crowded
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 with a number of infrastructure issues and problems.
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, I was a kid having an excellent artistic vision;
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, I rarely had a chance to develop it beneficially until my formative years before the
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. I grew my knowledge in graphics along with society fields which caused me in choosing Urban Planning at
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. After a while of studying, I understood that many public spaces have been changed to traffic commuting and other side effects which are the causes of the lack of appropriate design and management.
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, I strive hard to improve my professional skills to be able to design suitable spaces in our
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 by addressing fundamental issues.
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, I learnt to work efficiently in a group along with promoting my communication with other pupils. On the one hand, being perseverant in practical courses, I can develop both hand-worked and digital programs including 2D and 3D software. To clarify, by learning these high-tech programs, I could communicate with a number of people in the world.
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, studying urbanization requires upgrading social and theoretical skills, so I had to divide more time to be upgraded entirely.
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, my final project, Evaluation of Urban Streets based on Walkability approach, got a high score among others that my tutor and I took to the international article in 2021. Since I have many concerns about sustainability and mobility in our
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, I am interested deeply in these topics so I will be part of a community that saves the
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 generations.
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, Italy is one of the ancient countries with a strong culture and appropriate design of its
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, I am of the opinion that studying for a graduate degree at your
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 in Milan can be helpful a lot to preserve my country against climate change and irrelevant renovation. In nutshell, studying abroad is a great chance for every student to learn more and more about their fields. I am going to apply to your
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 in X field due to its high rank among the other universities and
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 widespread research compared with the other Italian universities has caused me to choose
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 for fall of 2024.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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