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In some country, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

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Owning a
home
 in several countries is pivotal while some prefer to rent.
This
 essay will discuss what are the benefit and drawbacks of
this
 situation. On the
first
 hand, we all know owning a
home
 is the most significant thing that we can enjoy in our life for the reason that it adds up to our assets, aside from that, we can
also
 do whatever we want without asking for any approval from someone. Living in a
place
 that you can proudly say is yours are comforting and satisfying because it lessens the burden of paying monthly dues.
However
, some
people
 believe that renting a house is the most practical way that's because
,
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 you can easily move from one
place
 to another especially if you work far from your hometown. But affiliated with
this
 will the bill that
people
 need to pay every single
month
 and the terms and condition that the landlord will provide,
for instance
 in the Philippines
people
 needs to pay a one-
month
month
 advance and one
month
 deposit before you can move into the new
place
,
this
 is the primary reason why a lot of
people
 have difficulty in renting or moving to another
place
.
On the other hand
, Owning a
home
 is quite difficult to achieve due to the price which is very expensive and not all
people
 can afford that and every year it will increasingly change. Some study says that the average earner may be able to afford to buy a house after 20 years of working if they can save up to 25% of their income each
month
. In conclusion, it seems that owning a
home
 is much more beneficial and outweighs the drawbacks in
this
 situation.
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