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inding it hard to remember important facts and figures? Improve your memory in 10 weeks with our Memory Course. Places are limited and the course is available for only a short time. You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to organisers of the course. In the letter: - Give some background information about yourself - Explain your own problems and why you would like to do the course. - enquire about the methods used on the course - enquire about course fees and dates.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I have read the advertisement for your Memory Course and I am
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concern
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 about your curriculum. I am a full-time mom with one toddler at the moment. Before I used to work as a teacher. After my pregnancy, I left my job and invested my time in my family. Now my baby is turning 2 years old and I am going to send him to kindergarten so that I can be back to work.
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, the problem is that after giving birth, I have had memory issues. I frequently forget things and my to-do lists, which is affecting seriously my life.
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 why I really care about the workshop you have given. It would be of great help if you
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 me with more details about the approaches that you use in
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 course. I’m wondering if the methods are suitable for me or not.
In addition
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, could you please give me information about how much the tuition for
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 class cost
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 when it begins
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 I am going to start my new job in the next 3 months so I want to make sure to finish the course before I am ready to work. I’m looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Crystal

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task response
It's always a good idea to explicitly address each point in the task to ensure full coverage. Your letter covers all the required aspects, but make certain to ask about each one directly for clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Using a variety of linking words and a clear paragraph structure can enhance your letter's coherence. You've managed well, but incorporating a wider range of connectors could further strengthen your writing.
coherence and cohesion
For even better cohesion, try to ensure each paragraph flows smoothly to the next by using phrases that signal the transition of thought.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter's structure, with distinct paragraphs for each topic, aids in readability and organization.
task response
Your tone is appropriately formal and polite, fitting the context of writing to an organizer of a professional course.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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