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People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? new experienence career preparation increased knowledge Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are more focused on
education
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 because
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 is the modern era where
education
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 is available for everyone; unlike, in the past. Surprisingly, the ratio of
students
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 getting higher
education
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 has increased significantly in the past few decades. In my opinion, getting a higher
education
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 is vital for
career
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 enhancement. I feel
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 way because of certain reasons which will be illustrated in the following essay.
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 with, advanced
education
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 is mandatory to get a good
job
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;
thus
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, it is the best way for
career
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 growth. In today's world, employers are more interested in a degree of a candidate to calculate if
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 person is a good fit for the
job
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 or not. Mostly,
students
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 try to gain more marks in the exam because they know high scores matter a lot in the obtain a handsome salary
job
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.
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, my friend only did a diploma in the electrical field, but he was never able to get a high-salary
job
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 like electrical engineers who graduate from well-known universities. Even though my friend is exceptional in his field, so the degree is the key factor that decides someone's
career
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 success.
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, while
students
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 study in universities or colleges they make good connections with staff members and other classmates, and
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 is extremely beneficial for
career
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 growth. usually,
people
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 who are studying at universities
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 work somewhere to earn money as well as gain experience, and the connection
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 develop with other
people
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 in university assists in getting better jobs.
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, when I was studying at university a few years back I made some friends in my department; luckily, one of my friends has a relative working in a multinational pharmaceutical company and with her help, I got an internship in that continental pharmaceutical industry. in conclusion,
career
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 development is the main reason for
people
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 to pursue higher
education
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 because companies are demanding highly educated
people
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, and all the qualities like adaptability, leadership, communication and analytical skills are present in highly educated
people
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, and all these qualities needed to become a perfect candidate for the
job
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.
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, learning at university
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 the social circle of a person and that helps in
career
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 promotion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Social enrichment
  • Professional qualifications
  • Economic mobility
  • Specialized expertise
  • Analytical prowess
  • Intellectual discourse
  • Alumni connections
  • Scholarly environment
  • Personal development
  • Financial prospects
  • Strategic thinking
  • Collaborative dynamics
  • Curriculum vitae
  • Lifelong learning
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