As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children’s social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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Human behaviour defines one’s personality and nature, but as a

person

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is growing up, his or

hers

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attitude

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changes

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significantly.

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, a teenager has a completely different attitude than an adult in a particular situation.

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essay will examine the key differences between the social manners of a young and a grown-up

person

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with, the foremost difference is that

children

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are adventurous and tend to be risk-takers as opposed to adults, who prefer choosing more stable living conditions.

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, as

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grow up, their tendency

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risks turns into a trait, that makes them more prone to starting a career in foreign countries, looking for more prospects, and meeting new people,

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grown-ups usually are too afraid of

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significant

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, because of the risk and uncertainty, socialising and forming new relationships

being

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a struggle for them. In fact,

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fear is not unreasonable, since

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are more adaptable, and it is much easier for them to adapt to a new environment and build a strong career and relationships in a foreign country,

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since adults often struggle to do so, they choose the safest option – avoid unnecessary

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. It is widely believed, that these

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are not very beneficial. It is obvious, that it is much better if a

person

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is not afraid to

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risks

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and try new things, but unfortunately,

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behavioral

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trait often disappears as a human being gets older.

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means that adults are too afraid to take life-changing opportunities and

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, sometimes are unable to better their living conditions.

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, a teenager is always going to take that job offer abroad or move to a faraway country with the goal

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of getting

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a better education or

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forming

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new relationships.

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, he has the opportunity to create a better

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for himself.

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, an adult, who is afraid to take those risks, is going to miss the opportunity and fail at creating a better

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. All in all,

children

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experience many

changes

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growing up, and not all of them are bad.

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, the change in their attitude towards new opportunities is detrimental to a

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future

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, because even if he is an adult, he still can make his

future

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brighter.

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coherence and cohesion

The essay lacks overall coherence and the logical structure of the ideas needs improvement.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

371 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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