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Some people believe that touristsdo not learn anything during their holidays, while others believe that they learn a lot. Discuss both sides .

There is currently a contentious argument over whether or not visitors gain
knowledge
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 during their
holidays
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.
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 some
people
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 say that it is impossible for
people
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 to learn anything during
holidays
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, I firmly believe that tourists learn and experience a lot. It is because they see
places
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 which give them in-depth
knowledge
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 about their culture and history that increase their
knowledge
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.
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 essay will not only shed light on both perceptions but
also
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 my point of view will be elaborated in the conclusion.
To begin
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 with, many
people
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 believe that visitors are unable to learn during their
holidays
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 as they are more focused on having fun.
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 may lead to a lack of interest in knowledgeable things.
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,
people
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 only go to
places
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 which are popular and avoid going to less boring
places
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 as historical
places
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.
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, a recent study held by the government of Maldives has shown that 90% of tourists only visited adventurous
places
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instead
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 of visiting ancient
places
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.
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,
people
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 do not get to experience their culture and traditions.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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 believe that visitors gain plenty of
knowledge
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.
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 is due to the fact that they meet
people
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of
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 different countries with
the
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 range of backgrounds.
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 will not only help them to learn about new cultures but they can
also
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 make friends from all over the globe.
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,
people
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 usually hire a tour guide who provides them detail information about the visiting country and arrange their schedule. I,
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, hired a tour guide when I visited Dubai so that I can go to only those locations which can help me learn about that country. In conclusion, I believe tourists gain plenty of information on
holidays
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 by means of
people
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 or by hiring a private tour guide even if they only want to visit fun
places
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.

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