Illiteracy has traditionally been viewed as largely a third world problem. However, it is becoming apparent that in countries such as USA and Australia illiteracy is on the increase. Discuss some possible causes and effects this phenomenon has on the society.

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problem in the world traditionally, it is true that
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in the United state of America and Australia. The impending essay will discuss the reasons for it and will elaborate effects of it
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the community. There are
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in the globe and why it is increasing
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among
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American and
Australian
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Australians
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. To start with, an increasing number of people in the world avoid learning environment due to high
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expenses
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contribute
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to unable pay
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fees because they have to pay for the rent and other bills. As a consequence, they avoid themselves and
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from attending school.
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, the University of Toronto announced that in 2019 yearly tuition fees for
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almost 13000$
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55% of students left
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.
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,
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in a significant effect in
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illiteracy
literacy
because they are the only educational materials for learning educational programs.
one
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of illiteracy
on
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the community is
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of professionals
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is because there will be few classes which in turn resulting few students in the classrooms.
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, the Times has announced that Texas has the fewest teachers in the entire province in America because just 100 hundred educators graduates yearly. Another negative effect of it is increasing the rate of
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crime
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in public areas because most
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criminals steal in order to earn money,
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, those who avoid
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environment
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become
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murder or
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. To conclude, it
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that people with
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of learning are
one
of the
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problem
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in the globe,
lack
of books and high fees are the main reasons
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it in the United States of America and Australia while
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crime and graduation of few
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teachers
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are the negative effect in the society.
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