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It is often said that retirement is the happiest time of one's life. How far do you agree or disagree with this view ?

#retirement #time #life
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In general, our world population is ageing consistently and the concern about the retired generation is rising noticeably nowadays. It is said that
retirement
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 is the happiest time of
one
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's
life
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. But it seems to me that
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 is not definitely a confirmative statement because there are still many situations that we need to look deeply into it to confirm the above comment.
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 of all, the
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 age is normally ranged from 55 to 65 and over. By
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 age, people are getting ageing with a weaker body which let them face lots of health issues
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 as heart diseases, headaches, back pain, and some other chronic diseases.
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 can lead to dissatisfaction with their health
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.
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,
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 like spending their time with their kids and grandchildren but some illnesses prevent them from performing their wishes. The other negative effect of
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 is that the older they get, the lesser their physical activities are performed. By,
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 we mean that the elderly have lesser leisure options than the earlier stage of
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.
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, they can not play the heavy sport but
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 of some light exercises to prevent them from hurting their body.
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 condition can
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 lead to other unexpected results
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 as their circle of relationship would be smaller which causes isolation within their own environment.
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 more negative factor is that old people would not feel happy when they have to rely on their family's support in terms of finance even if they are likely being looked after by their family and society. In conclusion, I do not really agree with the idea that
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 is the most blossoming period of
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's
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 while there are lots of unexpected scenarios that could be appeared in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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