Some people think the Olympic Games are exciting and can bring nations together. Others, however, think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some are of the view that the
Olympics
are astonishing and can bring countries to common
ground whereas others think Add an article
the common
its
a decay of finances. While the games Correct your spelling
it's
itself
have opportunities for individuals Correct pronoun usage
themselves
it
can be a paradise for fraud and mismanagement.
The Correct pronoun usage
they
Olympics
is the only stage where world's
top athletes compete for supremacy. Correct article usage
the world's
To begin
,with this
helps athletes around the world
come together, and show their talents to the world
. Secondly
, it gives an opportunity to nations around the world
to put their differences aside and come together. As an example, the world
,war two Olympics
pave the way to a ceasefire conduct the event which was the climax of the century. Finally
, the game will help to increase camaraderie among athletes and share their experiences and learn from each other.
On the contrary
, at the hands of the wrong ,authorities it can have detrimental effects to
the economy. Change preposition
on
Firstly
, conducting an event of such
magnitude requires millions of dollars to be spent in a short period of time. For instance
, in 2016 Brazil hosted the Olympics
and invested billions in the improvement of infrastructure in the country, nevertheless
right after the game's country went in
a debt trap resulting Change preposition
into
an
economic collapse. Change preposition
in an
In addition
to this
, a report issued by the IMF showcased the extent public funds were misused by the government without any understanding of the repercussions.
In conclusion, although
conducting Olympics
in a country where transparency and rule of law is
upheld can be a success, it will have devastating effects Change the verb form
are
to
countries Change preposition
on
who
are unable to invest money Correct pronoun usage
that
to
the event accurately resulting in bankruptcyChange preposition
in
. .
Replace the punctuation
.
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