Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is a common phenomenon that some
children
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are getting obsessed with their
smartphones
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nowadays. In my opinion, it should arouse more concern because it is definitely harmful to young people and there are a variety of reasons towards
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. There are three main aspects for us to conduct the courses. To start with the parents, many parents are not as responsible as they should be. Some of them who are busy with work
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likely to throw a smartphone at their
children
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, leaving them
watching
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cartoons to make them quiet.
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, it is required in schools to accomplish homework or activities by using
smartphones
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.
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they offer access to mobile
phone
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for
children
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.
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,
smartphones
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are indeed popular in today's society.
Children
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could watch videoes, play games, communicate with their friends and search
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online through
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. Life could be less colourful and inconvenient if one does not
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with a handset.
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, relying too much on
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could be devastating for young people.
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, it will do harm to
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's eyes if they watch digital screens for hours and hours consistently. It is no wonder now there are an increasing number of
children
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who are short-sighted from kindergarten.
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, spending time on
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and communicating with others online without face-to-face may damage
children
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's social abilities, which will affect them in a long run.
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, young
children
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who are exposed overly to the internet tend to become more influenced by KOLs and celebrities.
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, some of them may care about fashion, outfits and makeup far more than their school works, even dropping out of school. In conclusion, parents, education systems and society should take their responsibilities together to protect
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from over usage of
smartphones
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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