Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

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Famous contests

such

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football

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the football

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world cup and other inter

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countries

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countries'

country's

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sports

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competitions are necessary in order to soothe global hostility and

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nationalistic emotions in a secure way. I believe that

sports

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tournaments on an international level can improve the relations of different

countries

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in a very safe and sound way, but the condition is when sportsman spirit is available in the

players

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Sports

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is one of the many factors which can bring different

players

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from various

countries

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together on a single forum or stage, not only that but

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sports

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let them

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to show sportsman spirit

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the ground as well.

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their

countries

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are on the edge of war,

but

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they shake hands with each other and smile,

for instance

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in the cricket match

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Pakistan and India,

players

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from each team meet and greet but both of the

countries

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have stressful

relation

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Moreover

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, competitions between two opposite

countries

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not just put

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were not just put

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the

players

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a single ground but the spectators of these nationalities are

also

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sitting together and try to cheer their teams up.

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although

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there is a spirit of

sports

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present in the

players

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but

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some individuals couldn’t manage their temperaments and they begin to fight and that has even led to

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fight between the spectators as well which can be considered

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a very dangerous situation on a

sports

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venue.

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, it can increase the stress between the two

countries

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more than before which can lead to some serious consequences. In my opinion,

Sports

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tournaments or mega events are effective in improving peace and harmony globally and I agree with that statement, but contestants should be trained in

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a way

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that they are able to control their emotions and anger.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

296 words

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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

Fully explain your ideas

Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People, who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent to do you agree or disagree?

People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views.

With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?