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Some people argue that internet-based lectures is better type of lectures. The other tend to believe that university-based lecture is still needed. Explain both side of the view and give your opinion.

#people #lectures #type #lecture #side
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Nowadays, almost all of
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theoretical
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theorical
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theoretical
 and practical knowledge in university are given by
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lectures
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, with developing technologies and educational services, many
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professors
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professors
 started to give internet-based
lectures
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 more often in recent
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, university-based
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lectures
 are still used, and there are
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disagreements
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 between students that prefer online
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 and students
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 like university-based
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. With the inventions in
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 sphere and technologies, and dissemination of online learning. Studying
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internet
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the internet
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which
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was unbelievable until
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 few years, gaining momentum these days. Because, it is
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convenient
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 and easy method of giving knowledge, and
student
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students
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 can take
lectures
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 or classes everywhere all needed is
internet
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an internet
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 connection.
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, it may be difficult to receive information from internet-based
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to
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someone, and
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prefer taking
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 offline at university. Because,
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offline,
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a student
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 plunges into the atmosphere of class and may concentrate better, so nothing will bother
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, taking university-based
lectures
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the student
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students
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to
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 cooperate with
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 teacher or classmates in real life, which is much better than online conversations. I believe that even if
technologies
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 and education
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possibility
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 to take internet-based
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, it is better and more productive to stick to
traditional
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 and tested method of university-based
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. Because
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 it is more
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convenient
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 to receive information offline for me.
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, it depends on
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the people
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, and internet-based
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 own benefits, so their
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popularity
populatity
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popularity
 among students is justified
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Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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