(Livia) Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague who is leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – Suggest a suitable date and time for the party – Recommend a venue – Propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.
Dear Livia,
I would like to inform you where and when will be the leaving party for our colleague Tom.
I have
choosen
the Costa Correct your spelling
chosen
restaurant
on the Sout Bank, there is so nice
place with Correct article usage
a nice
the
live music, inside the Correct article usage
apply
restaurant
are
so Correct pronoun usage
there are
amazing
pictures Correct word choice
many amazing
of
the walls. The address is: 18 Avenue Street, South Brisbane, 4 000, a place is close Change preposition
on
our
office. Approximate date of reservation Change preposition
to our
18th
Add a missing verb
is 18th
Correct your spelling
September
Septembera
at 6:00 pm, a recommendation clothes is a casual dress.
The menu at the Correct your spelling
September
restaurant
is so various. You can choose a Japanese kitchen - where you can taste - sushi a lot of variants, nudlles with meat, a lot of types Japanise soups or if you don´t like Japanese kitchen you can try Italian kitchen - where they provide a lot of types pizzas, pastas or the plates with their specific cheeses and chorrizos.
It would be fine to choose the entry food and main food before to go. I have attached their menu and if we make to choose for this
restaurant
, it would be fine to send the menu to other colleagues.
Please let me know, if this
restaurant
looks great for you, if yes, I will book this
amazing place for our team and our great colleague Tom.
Thank you!
Kind regards
Andrea KroupaSubmitted by andrea.kroupova on
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task achievement
Consider double-checking the venue address format and perhaps providing additional information about transportation or parking if relevant.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph covers a single idea completely to enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-executed and appropriate for the context.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task with detailed suggestions and explanations.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite