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People think that the Internet is useless or dangerous. Do you think that's true?

#people #internet
Many believe that the
internet
 is harmful to people. But in the modern world, it's difficult to imagine life without using the
internet
. With the help of the
internet
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 you can get a lot of useful information
,
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 because you no longer need to go to the library, look for
this
 information. And of course can
some
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get an education, an additional profession or beginners people, you can communicate with someone who is in others countries
on
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 the world. Which
your
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favorite
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 or missed movie, show,
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serials
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.
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 But has several harms to the
internet
, of them: a long pastime in front of the monitor can affect a person's vision, especially for children. Because children watch tv a lot of time during a child. And it's dangerous to give the
internet
 your personal
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, home
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address
adress
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address
, phone number and any personal information
,
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 because
this
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the help of
this
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, hackers can easily deceive and harm you.
Therefore
, be vigilant when using the
internet
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Consumer behavior
  • Virtual marketplace
  • Cybersecurity
  • Digital footprint
  • Return policy
  • Comparison shopping
  • Customer reviews
  • Retail therapy
  • Logistics
  • User interface
  • Payment gateway
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